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刘玉泉:以"成长"为话题的作文【桎梏与光阴】

2019年11月14日 16:57

【<】【p】【>】【书】【卷】【很】【美】【,】【美】【到】【不】【朽】【,】【美】【到】【让】【人】【神】【往】【;】【书】【卷】【飘】【香】【,】【悄】【然】【沁】【入】【心】【间】【,】【让】【人】【生】【一】【路】【芬】【芳】【。】【<】【/】【p】【>】

【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【在】【人】【生】【的】【旅】【途】【中】【,】【我】【们】【经】【常】【会】【遇】【到】【荆】【棘】【地】【,】【当】【我】【遇】【到】【它】【的】【时】【候】【,】【我】【总】【会】【在】【心】【里】【大】【声】【呐】【喊】【:】【我】【并】【不】【差】【,】【我】【一】【定】【会】【越】【过】【去】【的】【!】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【记】【得】【那】【次】【我】【和】【同】【学】【去】【爬】【山】【,】【那】【山】【很】【高】【,】【而】【且】【有】【很】【多】【地】【方】【都】【很】【不】【好】【走】【。】【我】【们】【开】【始】【爬】【山】【比】【赛】【,】【有】【几】【个】【同】【学】【一】【开】【始】【就】【快】【速】【地】【爬】【到】【了】【最】【前】【面】【,】【把】【我】【们】【远】【远】【地】【甩】【在】【了】【后】【面】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【七】【月】【骄】【阳】【似】【火】【,】【火】【辣】【辣】【的】【太】【阳】【炙】【烤】【着】【大】【地】【,】【脚】【下】【的】【地】【面】【也】【冒】【着】【热】【气】【。】【在】【这】【样】【热】【的】【环】【境】【中】【,】【我】【还】【没】【爬】【到】【半】【山】【腰】【就】【气】【喘】【吁】【吁】【了】【。】【抬】【头】【望】【望】【他】【们】【,】【我】【已】【经】【被】【落】【得】【好】【远】【了】【。】【我】【有】【气】【无】【力】【地】【一】【步】【一】【步】【地】【走】【着】【,】【脚】【下】【一】【不】【留】【神】【,】【一】【下】【就】【重】【重】【地】【摔】【在】【地】【上】【。】【真】【是】【倒】【霉】【,】【膝】【盖】【破】【了】【。】【我】【的】【脑】【子】【里】【出】【现】【了】【一】【个】【念】【头】【:】【放】【弃】【吧】【。】【我】【再】【一】【次】【看】【了】【看】【前】【面】【,】【准】【备】【放】【弃】【。】【可】【转】【念】【一】【想】【,】【不】【就】【是】【被】【他】【们】【落】【得】【远】【点】【吗】【?】【不】【就】【是】【把】【膝】【盖】【弄】【破】【了】【吗】【?】【这】【点】【困】【难】【休】【想】【让】【我】【放】【弃】【,】【我】【并】【不】【差】【,】【我】【一】【定】【会】【超】【过】【他】【们】【的】【!】【我】【在】【心】【里】【暗】【下】【决】【心】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【我】【站】【了】【起】【来】【,】【忍】【着】【疼】【痛】【快】【速】【地】【追】【赶】【。】【尽】【管】【那】【太】【阳】【的】【威】【力】【不】【减】【,】【尽】【管】【我】【汗】【流】【不】【止】【,】【尽】【管】【那】【一】【股】【股】【的】【汗】【水】【流】【进】【伤】【口】【,】【钻】【心】【地】【疼】【…】【…】【我】【的】【步】【伐】【从】【未】【减】【慢】【,】【还】【逐】【渐】【地】【加】【快】【。】【这】【样】【,】【我】【超】【过】【了】【一】【个】【、】【两】【个】【、】【三】【个】【同】【学】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【我】【开】【始】【浑】【身】【无】【力】【,】【那】【该】【死】【的】【伤】【口】【疼】【得】【更】【厉】【害】【了】【。】【“】【休】【息】【一】【下】【吧】【,】【太】【累】【了】【。】【”】【懒】【惰】【的】【我】【在】【脑】【海】【里】【苦】【苦】【地】【哀】【求】【着】【。】【“】【不】【行】【,】【坚】【持】【,】【坚】【持】【,】【前】【面】【还】【有】【四】【个】【同】【学】【呢】【,】【一】【定】【要】【把】【他】【们】【超】【过】【去】【。】【”】【另】【一】【个】【我】【坚】【决】【地】【说】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【最】【终】【我】【选】【择】【了】【坚】【持】【,】【绝】【不】【能】【放】【弃】【。】【我】【咬】【紧】【牙】【关】【,】【心】【里】【一】【遍】【一】【遍】【地】【默】【念】【着】【:】【我】【不】【累】【,】【我】【不】【疼】【。】【我】【并】【不】【差】【,】【一】【定】【能】【超】【过】【他】【们】【,】【坚】【持】【到】【最】【后】【!】【快】【到】【山】【顶】【的】【时】【候】【,】【我】【什】【么】【都】【不】【顾】【了】【,】【飞】【快】【地】【向】【山】【顶】【跑】【了】【过】【去】【,】【我】【把】【他】【们】【全】【超】【了】【过】【去】【。】【当】【我】【到】【达】【山】【顶】【的】【那】【一】【刻】【,】【我】【的】【眼】【泪】【一】【下】【子】【就】【涌】【了】【出】【来】【。】【我】【不】【知】【那】【是】【获】【得】【成】【功】【之】【后】【幸】【福】【的】【泪】【,】【还】【是】【因】【疼】【痛】【流】【下】【的】【泪】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【在】【泪】【水】【的】【模】【糊】【中】【,】【我】【大】【声】【呐】【喊】【:】【“】【我】【并】【不】【差】【,】【我】【终】【于】【成】【功】【了】【!】【”】【那】【声】【音】【在】【山】【谷】【中】【回】【荡】【着】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【相】【信】【自】【己】【,】【会】【使】【你】【越】【过】【荆】【棘】【,】【超】【过】【鸿】【沟】【,】【它】【像】【一】【只】【船】【带】【你】【到】【达】【成】【功】【的】【彼】【岸】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【(】【指】【导】【老】【师】【:】【申】【君】【)】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【点】【 】【评】【:】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【文】【中】【写】【爬】【山】【过】【程】【,】【为】【什】【么】【写】【得】【逼】【真】【逼】【肖】【,】【“】【字】【立】【纸】【上】【”】【?】【因】【为】【作】【者】【用】【了】【形】【象】【具】【体】【的】【行】【动】【描】【写】【和】【细】【腻】【入】【微】【的】【心】【理】【描】【写】【。】【在】【半】【山】【腰】【,】【“】【我】【”】【摔】【倒】【了】【,】【摔】【破】【了】【膝】【盖】【,】【于】【是】【想】【放】【弃】【,】【这】【是】【一】【抑】【,】【“】【转】【念】【一】【想】【”】【,】【“】【这】【点】【困】【难】【休】【想】【让】【我】【放】【弃】【”】【,】【又】【是】【一】【扬】【。】【这】【段】【内】【心】【独】【白】【写】【得】【很】【细】【腻】【。】【不】【畏】【难】【不】【服】【输】【的】【心】【理】【支】【配】【着】【“】【我】【”】【的】【行】【动】【,】【使】【我】【忍】【痛】【坚】【持】【。】【过】【了】【一】【会】【儿】【,】【又】【感】【“】【浑】【身】【无】【力】【”】【,】【文】【中】【采】【用】【内】【心】【自】【省】【技】【法】【,】【写】【两】【个】【“】【我】【”】【在】【内】【心】【里】【打】【架】【,】【一】【个】【要】【休】【息】【,】【一】【个】【要】【坚】【持】【,】【这】【又】【是】【一】【抑】【,】【然】【而】【最】【终】【选】【择】【了】【坚】【持】【,】【并】【登】【上】【山】【顶】【,】【又】【是】【一】【扬】【。】【这】【两】【抑】【两】【扬】【,】【写】【出】【了】【波】【澜】【,】【使】【登】【山】【活】【动】【富】【有】【情】【趣】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【(】【点】【评】【老】【师】【:】【甫】【田】【)】【<】【b】【r】【>】刘玉泉【<】【p】【>】【真】【正】【的】【跟】【大】【家】【融】【入】【到】【一】【起】【,】【是】【冬】【至】【包】【水】【饺】【的】【时】【候】【,】【在】【那】【个】【有】【些】【冷】【有】【点】【想】【家】【的】【节】【日】【里】【,】【一】【群】【人】【围】【坐】【在】【一】【起】【,】【包】【着】【水】【饺】【,】【聊】【些】【日】【常】【,】【感】【情】【立】【马】【生】【活】【,】【整】【个】【周】【边】【的】【气】【氛】【都】【感】【觉】【很】【温】【暖】【,】【有】【时】【候】【身】【在】【异】【乡】【,】【总】【是】【特】【别】【想】【家】【,】【可】【是】【有】【这】【样】【一】【群】【人】【刚】【好】【出】【现】【,】【就】【会】【莫】【名】【的】【互】【相】【靠】【近】【,】【一】【起】【取】【暖】【。】【<】【/】【p】【>】

【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【记】【叙】【文】【靠】【具】【体】【、】【生】【动】【的】【形】【象】【感】【人】【。】【这】【就】【要】【求】【我】【们】【无】【论】【是】【记】【人】【叙】【事】【,】【还】【是】【写】【景】【状】【物】【,】【都】【应】【具】【体】【生】【动】【,】【有】【血】【有】【肉】【,】【切】【忌】【空】【泛】【造】【假】【,】【贫】【瘠】【枯】【瘦】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【先】【谈】【写】【人】【。】【写】【人】【除】【了】【必】【须】【具】【体】【描】【写】【人】【物】【的】【外】【貌】【、】【表】【情】【、】【动】【作】【、】【语】【言】【外】【,】【还】【要】【注】【意】【细】【节】【描】【写】【。】【这】【是】【突】【出】【人】【物】【性】【格】【,】【把】【人】【物】【写】【得】【精】【彩】【的】【重】【要】【手】【段】【。】【有】【些】【同】【学】【恰】【恰】【忽】【略】【了】【这】【一】【点】【。】【他】【们】【写】【人】【,】【往】【往】【采】【用】【“】【贴】【标】【签】【”】【的】【方】【法】【,】【首】【先】【给】【他】【“】【定】【了】【性】【”】【,】【堆】【砌】【几】【个】【华】【丽】【的】【辞】【藻】【,】【如】【:】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【我】【有】【一】【个】【好】【妈】【妈】【,】【慈】【祥】【的】【脸】【上】【永】【远】【带】【着】【和】【蔼】【的】【笑】【容】【。】【因】【为】【旧】【社】【会】【她】【没】【有】【念】【过】【多】【少】【书】【,】【所】【以】【总】【是】【一】【个】【劲】【地】【督】【促】【我】【们】【好】【好】【学】【习】【,】【并】【在】【生】【活】【上】【、】【学】【习】【上】【对】【我】【百】【般】【照】【顾】【,】【无】【微】【不】【至】【,】【处】【处】【体】【现】【了】【伟】【大】【的】【母】【爱】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【如】【果】【后】【面】【还】【有】【具】【体】【的】【描】【写】【,】【这】【段】【话】【作】【为】【开】【头】【,】【当】【然】【可】【以】【,】【但】【遗】【憾】【的】【是】【,】【这】【竟】【是】【文】【章】【的】【主】【体】【部】【分】【。】【仅】【用】【“】【百】【般】【照】【顾】【”】【“】【无】【微】【不】【至】【”】【“】【伟】【大】【的】【母】【爱】【”】【这】【些】【空】【洞】【的】【词】【语】【,】【能】【说】【明】【母】【亲】【就】【是】【一】【个】【“】【好】【妈】【妈】【”】【吗】【?】【这】【很】【难】【使】【人】【信】【服】【,】【修】【改】【后】【的】【文】【章】【就】【写】【得】【具】【体】【多】【了】【:】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【…】【…】【不】【知】【什】【么】【声】【音】【把】【我】【从】【梦】【中】【惊】【醒】【,】【我】【睁】【开】【眼】【睛】【一】【看】【,】【厨】【房】【里】【的】【灯】【已】【经】【亮】【了】【,】【不】【时】【传】【来】【锅】【碗】【的】【轻】【响】【。】【我】【伸】【手】【拿】【过】【桌】【上】【的】【闹】【钟】【,】【借】【着】【从】【厨】【房】【里】【映】【过】【来】【的】【亮】【光】【看】【了】【看】【,】【还】【不】【到】【五】【点】【。】【今】【天】【是】【星】【期】【日】【,】【妈】【妈】【还】【和】【往】【常】【一】【样】【,】【起】【得】【这】【样】【早】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【我】【翻】【过】【身】【,】【细】【听】【着】【厨】【房】【里】【的】【声】【响】【。】【“】【哗】【—】【—】【”】【,】【这】【是】【妈】【妈】【在】【轻】【轻】【地】【舀】【水】【;】【“】【哧】【—】【—】【噗】【!】【”】【这】【是】【妈】【妈】【在】【开】【煤】【气】【炉】【;】【“】【咔】【啦】【咔】【啦】【”】【,】【这】【是】【妈】【妈】【在】【拿】【碗】【筷】【。】【在】【静】【静】【的】【清】【晨】【,】【这】【声】【音】【是】【那】【样】【的】【清】【晰】【,】【又】【是】【那】【样】【的】【熟】【悉】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【作】【者】【用】【醒】【来】【的】【所】【见】【、】【所】【闻】【,】【具】【体】【地】【写】【出】【了】【妈】【妈】【每】【天】【起】【早】【做】【饭】【的】【情】【景】【。】【这】【真】【实】【、】【具】【体】【、】【生】【动】【、】【形】【象】【的】【记】【叙】【比】【起】【对】【妈】【妈】【“】【任】【劳】【任】【怨】【、】【辛】【勤】【劳】【作】【”】【的】【赞】【叹】【,】【不】【知】【要】【强】【多】【少】【倍】【!】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【大】【家】【都】【知】【道】【《】【水】【浒】【传】【》】【中】【的】【打】【虎】【英】【雄】【是】【武】【松】【,】【而】【不】【是】【李】【逵】【。】【为】【什】【么】【武】【松】【打】【死】【一】【只】【虎】【会】【深】【深】【地】【震】【动】【我】【们】【的】【心】【弦】【,】【而】【李】【逵】【杀】【了】【四】【只】【虎】【,】【留】【给】【读】【者】【的】【印】【象】【却】【远】【不】【如】【武】【松】【呢】【?】【这】【里】【面】【的】【诀】【窍】【就】【在】【一】【个】【描】【绘】【的】【具】【体】【生】【动】【,】【精】【彩】【异】【常】【,】【另】【一】【个】【则】【“】【缺】【少】【细】【节】【,】【贫】【瘠】【枯】【瘦】【”】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【细】【节】【不】【仅】【能】【充】【实】【内】【容】【,】【使】【之】【具】【有】【浓】【厚】【的】【生】【活】【气】【息】【,】【具】【有】【震】【撼】【人】【心】【的】【艺】【术】【力】【量】【,】【更】【重】【要】【的】【是】【,】【具】【有】【典】【型】【意】【义】【的】【细】【节】【,】【能】【表】【现】【出】【人】【物】【鲜】【明】【的】【个】【性】【。】【吴】【敬】【梓】【的】【《】【儒】【林】【外】【史】【》】【中】【,】【有】【一】【段】【对】【严】【监】【生】【死】【前】【伸】【着】【两】【个】【指】【头】【这】【一】【细】【节】【的】【描】【写】【:】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【自】【此】【,】【严】【监】【生】【的】【病】【,】【一】【日】【重】【似】【一】【日】【,】【再】【不】【回】【头】【,】【诸】【来】【六】【眷】【都】【来】【问】【候】【…】【…】【晚】【间】【挤】【了】【一】【屋】【的】【人】【,】【桌】【上】【点】【着】【一】【盏】【灯】【。】【严】【监】【生】【喉】【咙】【里】【痰】【响】【得】【一】【进】【一】【出】【,】【一】【声】【不】【倒】【一】【声】【的】【,】【总】【不】【得】【断】【气】【,】【还】【把】【手】【从】【被】【单】【里】【拿】【出】【来】【,】【伸】【着】【两】【个】【指】【头】【。】【大】【侄】【子】【走】【上】【前】【来】【问】【道】【:】【“】【二】【叔】【,】【你】【莫】【不】【是】【还】【有】【两】【个】【亲】【人】【不】【曾】【见】【面】【?】【”】【他】【就】【把】【头】【摇】【了】【两】【三】【摇】【。】【二】【侄】【子】【走】【上】【前】【来】【问】【道】【:】【“】【二】【叔】【,】【莫】【不】【是】【还】【有】【两】【笔】【银】【子】【在】【那】【里】【,】【不】【曾】【吩】【咐】【明】【白】【?】【”】【他】【把】【两】【眼】【睁】【得】【溜】【圆】【,】【把】【头】【又】【狠】【狠】【摇】【了】【几】【摇】【,】【越】【发】【指】【得】【紧】【了】【。】【奶】【妈】【抱】【着】【哥】【子】【插】【口】【道】【:】【“】【老】【爷】【想】【是】【因】【为】【两】【位】【舅】【爷】【不】【在】【跟】【前】【,】【故】【此】【惦】【念】【。】【”】【他】【听】【了】【这】【话】【,】【把】【眼】【闭】【着】【摇】【头】【,】【那】【手】【只】【是】【指】【着】【不】【动】【。】【赵】【氏】【慌】【忙】【揩】【揩】【眼】【泪】【,】【走】【近】【上】【前】【道】【:】【“】【爷】【,】【别】【人】【都】【说】【不】【相】【干】【,】【只】【有】【我】【晓】【得】【你】【的】【意】【思】【!】【”】【…】【…】【“】【你】【是】【为】【那】【灯】【盏】【里】【点】【的】【是】【两】【茎】【灯】【草】【,】【不】【放】【心】【,】【恐】【费】【了】【油】【。】【我】【如】【今】【挑】【掉】【一】【茎】【就】【是】【了】【。】【”】【说】【罢】【,】【忙】【走】【出】【挑】【掉】【一】【茎】【。】【众】【人】【看】【严】【监】【生】【时】【,】【点】【一】【点】【头】【,】【把】【手】【垂】【下】【,】【登】【时】【就】【没】【了】【气】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【严】【监】【生】【是】【个】【吝】【啬】【鬼】【,】【因】【为】【多】【点】【一】【茎】【灯】【草】【,】【死】【不】【瞑】【目】【。】【作】【者】【通】【过】【这】【一】【典】【型】【细】【节】【的】【描】【绘】【,】【把】【这】【个】【吝】【啬】【鬼】【特】【有】【的】【精】【神】【面】【貌】【和】【鲜】【明】【个】【性】【深】【刻】【地】【表】【现】【出】【来】【了】【。】【淋】【漓】【尽】【致】【地】【表】【现】【了】【这】【个】【吝】【啬】【鬼】【的】【丑】【恶】【灵】【魂】【,】【真】【是】【写】【得】【入】【木】【三】【分】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【从】【这】【里】【也】【可】【以】【看】【出】【,】【选】【择】【细】【节】【要】【根】【据】【表】【现】【人】【物】【性】【格】【的】【需】【要】【和】【表】【现】【主】【题】【的】【需】【要】【,】【否】【则】【再】【生】【动】【的】【细】【节】【也】【毫】【无】【意】【义】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【再】【说】【记】【事】【。】【要】【把】【一】【件】【事】【写】【得】【具】【体】【,】【就】【得】【抓】【住】【重】【点】【详】【写】【,】【要】【浓】【墨】【重】【彩】【,】【要】【精】【雕】【细】【刻】【,】【不】【能】【只】【用】【那】【些】【概】【括】【抽】【象】【的】【语】【言】【。】【如】【,】【同】【样】【是】【写】【《】【联】【欢】【会】【》】【,】【一】【个】【同】【学】【是】【这】【样】【写】【的】【:】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【联】【欢】【会】【开】【得】【太】【热】【烈】【,】【太】【丰】【富】【,】【太】【激】【动】【人】【心】【了】【!】【悦】【耳】【的】【歌】【声】【,】【翩】【翩】【的】【舞】【姿】【,】【还】【有】【增】【长】【才】【智】【的】【文】【学】【知】【识】【抢】【答】【,】【从】【下】【午】【2】【点】【一】【直】【进】【行】【到】【8】【点】【,】【大】【家】【才】【恋】【恋】【不】【舍】【地】【离】【去】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【这】【里】【,】【华】【丽】【的】【辞】【藻】【掩】【盖】【不】【了】【内】【容】【的】【空】【洞】【,】【铿】【锵】【的】【语】【句】【难】【以】【粉】【饰】【内】【在】【的】【贫】【乏】【。】【须】【知】【,】【“】【热】【烈】【”】【“】【丰】【富】【”】【“】【激】【动】【人】【心】【”】【,】【只】【有】【通】【过】【事】【件】【表】【现】【出】【来】【,】【才】【是】【成】【功】【的】【记】【事】【。】【修】【改】【后】【的】【文】【章】【就】【具】【体】【、】【生】【动】【得】【多】【了】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【水】【,】【水】【落】【石】【出】【。】【”】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【出】【,】【出】【其】【不】【意】【。】【”】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【意】【,】【意】【气】【风】【发】【。】【”】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【发】【,】【发】【扬】【光】【大】【。】【”】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【大】【,】【大】【义】【凛】【然】【。】【”】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【然】【,】【然】【—】【—】【然】【—】【—】【”】【这】【下】【可】【把】【周】【皓】【月】【难】【住】【了】【,】【只】【见】【她】【双】【眉】【紧】【锁】【,】【在】【极】【力】【思】【考】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【请】【周】【皓】【月】【表】【演】【节】【目】【!】【”】【班】【主】【任】【曹】【老】【师】【话】【音】【刚】【落】【“】【哗】【—】【—】【”】【掌】【声】【雷】【动】【,】【周】【皓】【月】【落】【落】【大】【方】【地】【走】【上】【台】【,】【放】【开】【歌】【喉】【唱】【起】【来】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【联】【欢】【会】【又】【进】【行】【下】【一】【个】【节】【目】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【“】【现】【在】【,】【我】【把】【某】【个】【同】【学】【的】【面】【貌】【描】【绘】【一】【下】【,】【请】【同】【学】【们】【说】【出】【这】【人】【是】【谁】【。】【”】【班】【主】【任】【说】【道】【:】【“】【白】【皙】【的】【皮】【肤】【,】【眼】【睛】【虽】【不】【大】【,】【可】【炯】【炯】【有】【神】【,】【剪】【着】【一】【个】【游】【泳】【头】【,】【一】【副】【运】【动】【员】【的】【样】【子】【。】【”】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【同】【学】【们】【你】【瞧】【瞧】【我】【,】【我】【望】【望】【你】【,】【突】【然】【,】【不】【知】【哪】【位】【同】【学】【说】【:】【“】【是】【沈】【玉】【兰】【!】【”】【顿】【时】【,】【几】【十】【道】【眼】【光】【一】【下】【子】【集】【中】【到】【沈】【玉】【兰】【身】【上】【,】【继】【而】【人】【们】【又】【摇】【头】【否】【认】【,】【不】【对】【!】【沈】【玉】【兰】【梳】【着】【两】【条】【小】【辫】【子】【。】【那】【是】【谁】【呢】【?】【几】【十】【道】【眼】【光】【像】【是】【几】【十】【盏】【探】【照】【灯】【,】【四】【处】【扫】【视】【着】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【当】【我】【的】【眼】【光】【一】【遇】【到】【身】【旁】【的】【程】【铭】【时】【,】【我】【就】【像】【得】【到】【宝】【贝】【似】【的】【心】【头】【一】【热】【,】【脱】【口】【而】【出】【:】【“】【是】【程】【铭】【!】【”】【在】【座】【的】【人】【异】【口】【同】【声】【欢】【呼】【:】【“】【对】【!】【是】【程】【铭】【!】【”】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【笑】【声】【、】【掌】【声】【久】【久】【不】【息】【,】【程】【铭】【难】【为】【情】【地】【涨】【红】【了】【脸】【,】【而】【我】【因】【为】【是】【第】【一】【个】【说】【对】【的】【,】【所】【以】【得】【到】【了】【两】【颗】【糖】【的】【奖】【励】【。】【这】【真】【是】【在】【甜】【甜】【蜜】【蜜】【、】【欢】【声】【笑】【语】【中】【长】【知】【识】【啊】【!】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【修】【改】【后】【的】【文】【章】【抓】【住】【了】【一】【些】【关】【键】【性】【的】【细】【节】【,】【重】【点】【突】【出】【,】【具】【体】【形】【象】【,】【写】【得】【有】【声】【有】【色】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【最】【后】【,】【说】【说】【写】【景】【状】【物】【。】【要】【写】【出】【景】【和】【物】【的】【具】【体】【形】【象】【,】【主】【要】【靠】【描】【写】【手】【段】【的】【运】【用】【。】【比】【如】【说】【,】【这】【个】【地】【方】【很】【美】【,】【究】【竟】【美】【在】【哪】【里】【?】【是】【亭】【台】【楼】【阁】【美】【,】【还】【是】【花】【草】【树】【木】【美】【?】【是】【绿】【水】【青】【山】【美】【,】【还】【是】【名】【胜】【古】【迹】【美】【?】【景】【物】【中】【有】【代】【表】【性】【的】【是】【哪】【些】【?】【它】【们】【有】【什】【么】【特】【征】【?】【如】【果】【能】【把】【重】【点】【景】【物】【的】【特】【征】【、】【状】【态】【描】【写】【出】【来】【,】【文】【章】【就】【会】【具】【体】【生】【动】【了】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【有】【个】【同】【学】【写】【《】【狮】【子】【林】【》】【,】【初】【稿】【是】【这】【样】【的】【:】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【说】【起】【假】【山】【,】【便】【想】【起】【了】【狮】【子】【林】【,】【狮】【子】【林】【里】【那】【些】【天】【然】【岩】【石】【构】【成】【的】【狮】【子】【的】【神】【情】【姿】【态】【,】【极】【为】【逼】【真】【,】【一】【个】【个】【栩】【栩】【如】【生】【。】【更】【妙】【的】【是】【,】【在】【山】【底】【或】【山】【腰】【,】【一】【个】【洞】【连】【着】【一】【个】【洞】【,】【层】【层】【叠】【叠】【,】【人】【们】【钻】【来】【穿】【去】【,】【妙】【趣】【横】【生】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【后】【来】【,】【在】【老】【师】【的】【指】【导】【下】【,】【他】【对】【初】【稿】【进】【行】【了】【修】【改】【,】【增】【加】【了】【具】【体】【生】【动】【的】【细】【节】【描】【写】【,】【基】【本】【上】【描】【绘】【出】【狮】【子】【林】【的】【特】【色】【,】【给】【人】【以】【身】【临】【其】【境】【的】【感】【觉】【。】【全】【文】【如】【下】【:】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【说】【起】【假】【山】【,】【便】【想】【起】【了】【狮】【子】【林】【。】【狮】【子】【林】【里】【那】【天】【然】【岩】【石】【构】【成】【的】【狮】【子】【的】【神】【情】【姿】【态】【,】【极】【为】【逼】【真】【。】【有】【的】【龇】【牙】【咧】【嘴】【,】【昂】【首】【长】【啸】【;】【有】【的】【瞪】【着】【两】【眼】【,】【威】【风】【凛】【凛】【;】【有】【的】【闭】【目】【养】【神】【,】【无】【精】【打】【采】【…】【…】【真】【是】【千】【姿】【百】【态】【,】【栩】【栩】【如】【生】【。】【它】【们】【组】【成】【一】【个】【个】【高】【耸】【的】【假】【山】【。】【从】【山】【脚】【到】【山】【顶】【沿】【路】【怪】【石】【嶙】【峋】【,】【迂】【回】【曲】【折】【。】【有】【时】【看】【得】【见】【山】【顶】【上】【的】【游】【客】【的】【眉】【目】【,】【也】【听】【得】【见】【他】【们】【的】【谈】【笑】【,】【可】【就】【是】【没】【法】【登】【山】【。】【等】【到】【你】【好】【不】【容】【易】【登】【上】【山】【巅】【,】【才】【会】【发】【现】【,】【竟】【有】【好】【几】【条】【石】【路】【可】【达】【山】【顶】【。】【更】【妙】【的】【是】【,】【在】【山】【底】【或】【山】【腰】【,】【一】【个】【洞】【连】【着】【一】【个】【洞】【,】【层】【层】【叠】【叠】【,】【人】【们】【钻】【来】【穿】【去】【,】【妙】【趣】【横】【生】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【细】【节】【描】【写】【是】【指】【抓】【住】【生】【活】【中】【细】【微】【而】【又】【具】【体】【的】【典】【型】【情】【节】【,】【加】【以】【生】【动】【细】【致】【的】【描】【绘】【,】【它】【具】【体】【渗】【透】【在】【对】【人】【物】【、】【景】【物】【或】【场】【面】【描】【写】【之】【中】【。】【正】【确】【运】【用】【细】【节】【描】【写】【,】【对】【表】【现】【人】【物】【、】【记】【叙】【事】【件】【、】【再】【现】【环】【境】【有】【着】【极】【其】【重】【要】【的】【作】【用】【。】【细】【节】【描】【写】【运】【用】【得】【好】【,】【做】【到】【写】【人】【则】【如】【见】【其】【人】【,】【写】【景】【则】【如】【临】【其】【境】【,】【文】【章】【就】【能】【形】【象】【鲜】【明】【,】【更】【具】【感】【染】【力】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】刘玉泉【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【风】【,】【是】【生】【活】【中】【再】【普】【通】【不】【过】【的】【了】【。】【冬】【天】【时】【,】【风】【几】【乎】【天】【天】【光】【顾】【,】【伴】【我】【上】【学】【,】【跟】【我】【回】【家】【,】【我】【们】【像】【形】【影】【不】【离】【的】【好】【友】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【风】【,】【不】【可】【捉】【摸】【,】【它】【来】【无】【影】【,】【去】【无】【踪】【,】【看】【不】【见】【,】【摸】【不】【到】【,】【可】【当】【它】【迎】【面】【而】【来】【,】【送】【来】【阵】【阵】【凉】【意】【的】【时】【候】【,】【你】【就】【能】【闻】【到】【它】【的】【气】【息】【,】【淡】【而】【清】【,】【似】【有】【似】【无】【,】【像】【是】【远】【处】【高】【楼】【上】【渺】【茫】【的】【声】【音】【,】【又】【像】【是】【几】【十】【里】【内】【的】【琴】【声】【。】【走】【在】【路】【上】【的】【时】【候】【,】【这】【气】【息】【就】【传】【来】【了】【,】【那】【朦】【胧】【的】【美】【感】【,】【让】【你】【在】【这】【境】【界】【中】【流】【连】【忘】【返】【。】【可】【当】【我】【仔】【细】【找】【寻】【它】【时】【,】【它】【却】【又】【和】【我】【捉】【起】【迷】【藏】【,】【调】【皮】【地】【跑】【开】【了】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【风】【啊】【风】【,】【让】【我】【怎】【么】【触】【摸】【到】【它】【的】【气】【息】【呢】【?】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【这】【可】【爱】【的】【风】【儿】【又】【是】【多】【变】【的】【。】【 】【“】【吹】【面】【不】【寒】【杨】【柳】【风】【”】【,】【春】【天】【时】【,】【这】【风】【儿】【时】【常】【爱】【抚】【着】【你】【,】【拥】【着】【你】【,】【抱】【着】【你】【,】【是】【那】【么】【温】【柔】【可】【人】【,】【有】【时】【它】【还】【含】【羞】【地】【看】【着】【你】【,】【像】【脉】【脉】【含】【情】【的】【少】【女】【;】【到】【夏】【天】【,】【这】【风】【就】【耍】【起】【了】【小】【性】【子】【,】【调】【皮】【起】【来】【,】【有】【时】【候】【甚】【至】【搅】【得】【天】【昏】【地】【暗】【,】【但】【它】【携】【来】【的】【瓢】【泼】【大】【雨】【,】【却】【洗】【尽】【了】【人】【间】【污】【浊】【,】【带】【来】【了】【一】【片】【清】【凉】【;】【秋】【天】【到】【了】【,】【它】【又】【变】【得】【那】【么】【香】【甜】【,】【空】【气】【中】【到】【处】【溢】【满】【了】【成】【熟】【的】【果】【香】【,】【沁】【人】【肺】【腑】【;】【冬】【天】【来】【了】【,】【它】【渐】【渐】【变】【得】【冷】【酷】【起】【来】【,】【温】【柔】【的】【轻】【风】【变】【成】【了】【小】【刀】【,】【人】【们】【似】【乎】【也】【不】【大】【喜】【欢】【它】【了】【。】【不】【过】【,】【当】【它】【吹】【落】【漫】【天】【雪】【花】【的】【时】【候】【,】【孩】【子】【们】【却】【个】【个】【着】【迷】【于】【它】【的】【独】【特】【魅】【力】【,】【瞧】【,】【孩】【子】【们】【在】【雪】【地】【里】【堆】【雪】【人】【,】【打】【雪】【仗】【,】【玩】【得】【多】【开】【心】【呀】【!】【那】【飘】【飘】【洒】【洒】【、】【飞】【飞】【扬】【扬】【的】【北】【国】【雪】【景】【是】【它】【在】【冬】【日】【的】【严】【寒】【里】【给】【人】【间】【送】【来】【的】【最】【美】【的】【礼】【物】【啊】【!】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【多】【姿】【、】【美】【丽】【的】【风】【儿】【呀】【,】【我】【喜】【欢】【你】【…】【…】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【(】【指】【导】【老】【师】【:】【石】【光】【海】【)】【<】【b】【r】【>】

刘玉泉:捏鸡蛋

【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【在】【人】【生】【的】【旅】【途】【中】【,】【我】【们】【经】【常】【会】【遇】【到】【荆】【棘】【地】【,】【当】【我】【遇】【到】【它】【的】【时】【候】【,】【我】【总】【会】【在】【心】【里】【大】【声】【呐】【喊】【:】【我】【并】【不】【差】【,】【我】【一】【定】【会】【越】【过】【去】【的】【!】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【记】【得】【那】【次】【我】【和】【同】【学】【去】【爬】【山】【,】【那】【山】【很】【高】【,】【而】【且】【有】【很】【多】【地】【方】【都】【很】【不】【好】【走】【。】【我】【们】【开】【始】【爬】【山】【比】【赛】【,】【有】【几】【个】【同】【学】【一】【开】【始】【就】【快】【速】【地】【爬】【到】【了】【最】【前】【面】【,】【把】【我】【们】【远】【远】【地】【甩】【在】【了】【后】【面】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【七】【月】【骄】【阳】【似】【火】【,】【火】【辣】【辣】【的】【太】【阳】【炙】【烤】【着】【大】【地】【,】【脚】【下】【的】【地】【面】【也】【冒】【着】【热】【气】【。】【在】【这】【样】【热】【的】【环】【境】【中】【,】【我】【还】【没】【爬】【到】【半】【山】【腰】【就】【气】【喘】【吁】【吁】【了】【。】【抬】【头】【望】【望】【他】【们】【,】【我】【已】【经】【被】【落】【得】【好】【远】【了】【。】【我】【有】【气】【无】【力】【地】【一】【步】【一】【步】【地】【走】【着】【,】【脚】【下】【一】【不】【留】【神】【,】【一】【下】【就】【重】【重】【地】【摔】【在】【地】【上】【。】【真】【是】【倒】【霉】【,】【膝】【盖】【破】【了】【。】【我】【的】【脑】【子】【里】【出】【现】【了】【一】【个】【念】【头】【:】【放】【弃】【吧】【。】【我】【再】【一】【次】【看】【了】【看】【前】【面】【,】【准】【备】【放】【弃】【。】【可】【转】【念】【一】【想】【,】【不】【就】【是】【被】【他】【们】【落】【得】【远】【点】【吗】【?】【不】【就】【是】【把】【膝】【盖】【弄】【破】【了】【吗】【?】【这】【点】【困】【难】【休】【想】【让】【我】【放】【弃】【,】【我】【并】【不】【差】【,】【我】【一】【定】【会】【超】【过】【他】【们】【的】【!】【我】【在】【心】【里】【暗】【下】【决】【心】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【我】【站】【了】【起】【来】【,】【忍】【着】【疼】【痛】【快】【速】【地】【追】【赶】【。】【尽】【管】【那】【太】【阳】【的】【威】【力】【不】【减】【,】【尽】【管】【我】【汗】【流】【不】【止】【,】【尽】【管】【那】【一】【股】【股】【的】【汗】【水】【流】【进】【伤】【口】【,】【钻】【心】【地】【疼】【…】【…】【我】【的】【步】【伐】【从】【未】【减】【慢】【,】【还】【逐】【渐】【地】【加】【快】【。】【这】【样】【,】【我】【超】【过】【了】【一】【个】【、】【两】【个】【、】【三】【个】【同】【学】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【我】【开】【始】【浑】【身】【无】【力】【,】【那】【该】【死】【的】【伤】【口】【疼】【得】【更】【厉】【害】【了】【。】【“】【休】【息】【一】【下】【吧】【,】【太】【累】【了】【。】【”】【懒】【惰】【的】【我】【在】【脑】【海】【里】【苦】【苦】【地】【哀】【求】【着】【。】【“】【不】【行】【,】【坚】【持】【,】【坚】【持】【,】【前】【面】【还】【有】【四】【个】【同】【学】【呢】【,】【一】【定】【要】【把】【他】【们】【超】【过】【去】【。】【”】【另】【一】【个】【我】【坚】【决】【地】【说】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【最】【终】【我】【选】【择】【了】【坚】【持】【,】【绝】【不】【能】【放】【弃】【。】【我】【咬】【紧】【牙】【关】【,】【心】【里】【一】【遍】【一】【遍】【地】【默】【念】【着】【:】【我】【不】【累】【,】【我】【不】【疼】【。】【我】【并】【不】【差】【,】【一】【定】【能】【超】【过】【他】【们】【,】【坚】【持】【到】【最】【后】【!】【快】【到】【山】【顶】【的】【时】【候】【,】【我】【什】【么】【都】【不】【顾】【了】【,】【飞】【快】【地】【向】【山】【顶】【跑】【了】【过】【去】【,】【我】【把】【他】【们】【全】【超】【了】【过】【去】【。】【当】【我】【到】【达】【山】【顶】【的】【那】【一】【刻】【,】【我】【的】【眼】【泪】【一】【下】【子】【就】【涌】【了】【出】【来】【。】【我】【不】【知】【那】【是】【获】【得】【成】【功】【之】【后】【幸】【福】【的】【泪】【,】【还】【是】【因】【疼】【痛】【流】【下】【的】【泪】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【在】【泪】【水】【的】【模】【糊】【中】【,】【我】【大】【声】【呐】【喊】【:】【“】【我】【并】【不】【差】【,】【我】【终】【于】【成】【功】【了】【!】【”】【那】【声】【音】【在】【山】【谷】【中】【回】【荡】【着】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【相】【信】【自】【己】【,】【会】【使】【你】【越】【过】【荆】【棘】【,】【超】【过】【鸿】【沟】【,】【它】【像】【一】【只】【船】【带】【你】【到】【达】【成】【功】【的】【彼】【岸】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【(】【指】【导】【老】【师】【:】【申】【君】【)】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【点】【 】【评】【:】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【文】【中】【写】【爬】【山】【过】【程】【,】【为】【什】【么】【写】【得】【逼】【真】【逼】【肖】【,】【“】【字】【立】【纸】【上】【”】【?】【因】【为】【作】【者】【用】【了】【形】【象】【具】【体】【的】【行】【动】【描】【写】【和】【细】【腻】【入】【微】【的】【心】【理】【描】【写】【。】【在】【半】【山】【腰】【,】【“】【我】【”】【摔】【倒】【了】【,】【摔】【破】【了】【膝】【盖】【,】【于】【是】【想】【放】【弃】【,】【这】【是】【一】【抑】【,】【“】【转】【念】【一】【想】【”】【,】【“】【这】【点】【困】【难】【休】【想】【让】【我】【放】【弃】【”】【,】【又】【是】【一】【扬】【。】【这】【段】【内】【心】【独】【白】【写】【得】【很】【细】【腻】【。】【不】【畏】【难】【不】【服】【输】【的】【心】【理】【支】【配】【着】【“】【我】【”】【的】【行】【动】【,】【使】【我】【忍】【痛】【坚】【持】【。】【过】【了】【一】【会】【儿】【,】【又】【感】【“】【浑】【身】【无】【力】【”】【,】【文】【中】【采】【用】【内】【心】【自】【省】【技】【法】【,】【写】【两】【个】【“】【我】【”】【在】【内】【心】【里】【打】【架】【,】【一】【个】【要】【休】【息】【,】【一】【个】【要】【坚】【持】【,】【这】【又】【是】【一】【抑】【,】【然】【而】【最】【终】【选】【择】【了】【坚】【持】【,】【并】【登】【上】【山】【顶】【,】【又】【是】【一】【扬】【。】【这】【两】【抑】【两】【扬】【,】【写】【出】【了】【波】【澜】【,】【使】【登】【山】【活】【动】【富】【有】【情】【趣】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【(】【点】【评】【老】【师】【:】【甫】【田】【)】【<】【b】【r】【>】刘玉泉【<】【p】【>】【你】【长】【我】【两】【岁】【,】【因】【学】【业】【的】【繁】【忙】【,】【我】【们】【已】【经】【许】【久】【未】【遇】【。】【<】【/】【p】【>】

【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【记】【忆】【中】【的】【五】【月】【初】【五】【,】【没】【别】【的】【,】【只】【有】【满】【屋】【子】【的】【粽】【子】【香】【,】【或】【许】【这】【也】【注】【定】【了】【我】【与】【粽】【子】【间】【的】【不】【解】【之】【缘】【吧】【!】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【很】【小】【很】【小】【的】【时】【候】【,】【最】【期】【待】【的】【莫】【过】【于】【端】【午】【节】【。】【等】【到】【了】【那】【一】【天】【,】【外】【婆】【总】【是】【忙】【里】【忙】【外】【地】【包】【粽】【子】【。】【而】【我】【,】【就】【站】【在】【一】【旁】【,】【饶】【有】【兴】【趣】【地】【看】【着】【,】【自】【以】【为】【这】【就】【是】【生】【平】【最】【大】【的】【乐】【趣】【。】【看】【着】【外】【婆】【娴】【熟】【的】【动】【作】【,】【将】【芦】【叶】【卷】【好】【,】【把】【糯】【米】【倒】【入】【其】【中】【,】【用】【绳】【扎】【好】【,】【这】【样】【,】【一】【个】【棱】【角】【分】【明】【的】【粽】【子】【就】【完】【成】【了】【,】【看】【着】【看】【着】【,】【我】【也】【有】【点】【耐】【不】【住】【性】【子】【了】【,】【于】【是】【,】【也】【学】【着】【外】【婆】【的】【样】【子】【,】【将】【芦】【叶】【卷】【好】【,】【倒】【入】【糯】【米】【,】【只】【是】【芦】【叶】【卷】【得】【不】【行】【,】【漏】【洞】【百】【出】【,】【害】【得】【糯】【米】【满】【地】【都】【是】【,】【到】【了】【扎】【绳】【子】【时】【,】【又】【是】【手】【忙】【脚】【乱】【,】【不】【知】【如】【何】【是】【好】【。】【这】【时】【外】【婆】【就】【会】【开】【心】【地】【笑】【着】【,】【并】【认】【真】【地】【教】【我】【,】【于】【是】【形】【状】【各】【异】【的】【粽】【子】【就】【在】【我】【手】【上】【诞】【生】【了】【…】【…】【 】【待】【粽】【子】【香】【飘】【满】【屋】【时】【,】【我】【就】【迫】【不】【及】【待】【地】【品】【尝】【自】【己】【包】【的】【粽】【子】【,】【心】【里】【美】【滋】【滋】【的】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【到】【了】【再】【大】【一】【点】【的】【时】【候】【,】【没】【有】【时】【间】【看】【外】【婆】【包】【粽】【子】【了】【,】【只】【是】【等】【到】【了】【粽】【子】【飘】【香】【时】【,】【品】【尝】【几】【个】【。】【不】【过】【,】【此】【时】【心】【境】【不】【同】【了】【。】【有】【一】【次】【,】【天】【真】【的】【我】【曾】【这】【样】【问】【外】【婆】【:】【“】【为】【什】【么】【要】【送】【粽】【子】【给】【屈】【原】【呀】【?】【”】【外】【婆】【笑】【笑】【说】【:】【“】【他】【很】【善】【良】【而】【且】【爱】【国】【呀】【!】【”】【于】【是】【,】【我】【开】【始】【了】【解】【屈】【原】【的】【品】【质】【,】【屈】【原】【的】【精】【神】【内】【涵】【。】【之】【后】【,】【品】【尝】【着】【清】【香】【醉】【人】【的】【粽】【子】【,】【静】【静】【地】【体】【味】【着】【历】【史】【的】【沧】【桑】【,】【真】【是】【别】【有】【一】【番】【情】【趣】【啊】【!】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【而】【现】【在】【,】【端】【午】【节】【的】【时】【候】【,】【多】【数】【情】【况】【下】【已】【不】【能】【在】【家】【中】【与】【父】【母】【团】【聚】【了】【。】【回】【想】【起】【童】【年】【包】【粽】【子】【的】【趣】【事】【,】【回】【味】【着】【外】【婆】【的】【那】【句】【淳】【朴】【的】【话】【,】【我】【顿】【时】【百】【感】【交】【集】【,】【一】【阵】【阵】【的】【甜】【蜜】【也】【会】【涌】【上】【心】【头】【…】【…】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【去】【年】【端】【午】【节】【,】【我】【又】【回】【到】【家】【中】【,】【外】【婆】【仍】【然】【在】【忙】【着】【。】【我】【悄】【悄】【地】【坐】【下】【来】【,】【像】【小】【时】【候】【那】【样】【,】【学】【着】【外】【婆】【的】【样】【子】【包】【粽】【子】【,】【于】【是】【就】【有】【了】【方】【粽】【,】【菱】【粽】【、】【子】【母】【粽】【…】【…】【 】【仔】【细】【一】【看】【,】【跟】【以】【前】【包】【的】【差】【不】【多】【,】【技】【术】【没】【有】【太】【大】【长】【进】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【我】【又】【品】【尝】【着】【自】【己】【包】【的】【粽】【子】【,】【一】【种】【熟】【悉】【的】【滋】【味】【涌】【上】【心】【头】【,】【如】【同】【粽】【子】【馅】【中】【的】【糯】【米】【那】【样】【纯】【正】【,】【又】【如】【芦】【叶】【般】【的】【清】【香】【脱】【俗】【!】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【点】【评】【:】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【文】【章】【以】【时】【间】【为】【顺】【序】【,】【从】【小】【时】【写】【起】【,】【思】【路】【脉】【络】【都】【很】【清】【晰】【。】【善】【于】【运】【用】【人】【物】【(】【外】【婆】【)】【的】【动】【作】【描】【写】【,】【有】【人】【物】【对】【话】【描】【写】【。】【这】【些】【描】【写】【在】【记】【叙】【文】【中】【运】【用】【,】【能】【很】【好】【地】【刻】【画】【人】【物】【性】【格】【,】【使】【人】【物】【鲜】【活】【起】【来】【,】【是】【记】【叙】【文】【写】【作】【不】【可】【缺】【少】【的】【要】【素】【。】【<】【b】【r】【>】【 】【 】【(】【指】【导】【老】【师】【:】【王】【伟】【安】【)】【<】【b】【r】【>】刘玉泉【<】【p】【>】【阅】【读】【吧】【,】【那】【是】【世】【界】【上】【,】【最】【美】【的】【姿】【态】【!】【<】【/】【p】【>】

刘玉泉:“感冒”一词的来源

【<】【p】【>】【原】【来】【,】【你】【以】【棋】【教】【会】【我】【的】【,】【是】【生】【命】【的】【意】【义】【。】【<】【/】【p】【>】刘玉泉【<】【p】【>】【在】【我】【五】【岁】【时】【,】【爸】【爸】【妈】【妈】【带】【着】【我】【来】【树】【勋】【开】【店】【,】【而】【舅】【舅】【舅】【妈】【都】【要】【去】【外】【地】【打】【工】【,】【就】【把】【表】【妹】【托】【给】【我】【家】【照】【顾】【。】【原】【本】【我】【觉】【得】【,】【表】【妹】【来】【了】【也】【没】【什】【么】【,】【至】【少】【能】【有】【个】【伴】【。】【但】【好】【景】【不】【长】【,】【自】【从】【隔】【壁】【叔】【叔】【阿】【姨】【知】【道】【表】【妹】【来】【了】【,】【每】【来】【我】【家】【就】【会】【逗】【表】【妹】【开】【心】【,】【我】【却】【只】【能】【一】【个】【人】【坐】【在】【那】【儿】【看】【。】【<】【/】【p】【>】

刘玉泉:理寓平淡情归自然

【<】【p】【>】【是】【婴】【孩】【总】【会】【为】【饿】【的】【难】【熬】【而】【不】【快】【乐】【,】【哭】【着】【想】【喝】【奶】【。】【人】【生】【的】【快】【乐】【不】【自】【始】【自】【终】【,】【遑】【论】【&】【l】【d】【q】【u】【o】【;】【永】【远】【&】【r】【d】【q】【u】【o】【;】【,】【是】【极】【致】【的】【荒】【谬】【,】【是】【否】【认】【&】【l】【d】【q】【u】【o】【;】【刻】【骨】【铭】【心】【&】【r】【d】【q】【u】【o】【;】【的】【蠢】【。】【<】【/】【p】【>】

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